08/27/10 - This is a manuscript written by myself and my amazing boyfriend (who we will call Tesshin Ginru for now). we worked it like an RP, taking turns writing lines, sending it to each other, correcting, adding, taking away. this manuscript is partcularly special because, well, i don't usually work with one. normally my writing starts in storyboard form. however, both Tesshin and i felt that my first ending did not set up the next chapter well enough. originally Virel's death was (somewhat) of an accident, and Kerrian ended up coming back to normal at the end of the fight. we scrapped these points and put more action in the fight. it will be so intense when it's finalized. seeing as there are 25 pages listed here (plus two more i must catch up on, plus another 7 pages from the previous scene that haven't been inked yet) these pages should be completed and uploaded by the end of September (approximatley 1 month).
1 ★-Kerrian lunges at Virel (in the window)
2 ★-Kerri realizes he’s missed and turns to face Virel,
3 ★-Virel notes how close she is to the wall
4 ★-Kerri growls, climbs up the wall
5 ★-***Virel swipes at him with the dagger
6 ★-Braeden climbs out the broken window just as they both reach the roof.
7 ★–Braeden then charges at Virel
8 ★-Virel continues the throw (full 360)
9 ★-Shot of Kerrian owned in fountain
10 ★-Braeden looks distressed, maybe like a “No!!!”
11 ★-Virel, mid air, eyes wide with fear
12 ★-Concrete shatters on her crossed arms
13 ★-Kerrian is like right in front of her
14 ★-BITE
15 ★-Virel looks to the sky
16 ★-SOUND EFFECT
17 ★–FULL PAGE EPIC TREE OWNAGE MURDER (branch penetrates from above angle)
18 ★-Kerrian breathes for a moment
19 ★-Kerrian clutches his head, howling
20 ★-Kerrian swipes at Braeden
21 ★–Kerrian walks towards Braeden
22 ★-Kerrian grabs Braeden by the hood
23 ★-extreme close up of Kerrian’s fangs trembling
24 ★–Ker lets out a frightening growl and runs off into the distance (2-3 cels)
25 ★–Rena followed by Brett arrive just in time to see Kerrian pass (must be opposite as Kerrian)
END OF CHAPTER 6
★-Virel hops out of the way, Kerrian passes her
★-Kerrian swipes at the tree, upwards, splintering it.
★-charges at her again
★- 3-4 progression cels of them parrying
★-jumps up, does back-flip
★-lands on roof
★-He pounces at her, but misses (dodge)
★-but Kerrian counters with his right hand
★-on the follow through, Kerrian swipes Virel’s face with 2 claws
★-she catches his arm by the elbow
★-Brae Jumps…
★-and lands on roof.
★-standoff shot of the 3 of them (showing Braeden’s hesitation)***[these 2 pages happen simultaneously]
★-she swings her arm forward
★-and hits Braeden WITH Kerrian
★-Braeden flies into HVAC unit
★-and seismic-tosses Kerrian into the fountain
★-Virel turns back showing Braeden is hurt and stuck in HVAC
★-Virel taunts Braeden about taking away something precious and jumps towards Kerrian
★-Kerrian opens eyes and grabs a slab of fountain
★-Slab is chucked HARD
★-Virel covers her face
★-She spins wildly and falls short, off balance
★-Moves hands away from face, shocked
★-Face slash, she spins around, blood flies
★-Kerrian grabs her arm and waist (or something) and opens WIDE
★-Braeden SHOCK
★-Virel eyes go tiny
★-Eyes show weakness
★-Kerrian screams, lifts her above head
★-TOSS to wall
★-SMASH into wall, cracks in wall, Virel stumbles to her feet
★-Kerrian walking towards her (walking!) blood down body (like in his mind)
★-Virel says sorry to Millicent
★-Kerrian hand Reaching down, grabbing something
★-Braeden screaming to K “stop!!!”
★-Virel’s face, blood coming from below her
★-Shot inside school, bloody tree slump sticking through wall, splinters etc bricks
★-Braeden more SHOCK maybe?
★-human Kerrian’s eyes flash for a moment
★-he sees what he’s done to Virel
★-show blood on his hands
★-Braeden hobbles over as fast as he can “Kerrian..!”
★-Kerrian is hunched over, and turns to look at Braeden with one eye
★-sending him flying across the courtyard
★-landing in the snow and sliding a small distance.
★-another cel of this
★-stops and stands above him, upward shot of Ker, Brae OTS close up
★-holds him up to his mouth
★-Kerrian hesitates, about to bite him
★-Kerrian tosses Braeden aside
★-Braeden slumps down unconscious in the snow
★-Kerrian meanders the courtyard grasping his head
★ -Rena sees her brother
★-"Braeden!!!" she runs over
★-Brett sees Virel and is shocked
★-‘What the hell happened here…?”